| Author | Message | ||
| Don Schaeffer
Valued Member Username: don_schaeffer Post Number: 144 Registered: 12-2003 |
My son's tree grows slim, visible through the blinds, has been my lighthouse as I emerge with my doubts from the dark night sea, flags life like the air, glowed today as I opened my eyes amid worn, settled things in the eerie first light of a tardy dawn. (Message edited by Don Schaeffer on October 04, 2005) | ||
| James Michael
Valued Member Username: punkikk Post Number: 154 Registered: 03-2004 |
this is my favorite image although i liked all of them: "It grows thin and tall in line with the thin vertical opening in our bedroom blinds." :-) <---- cool signature ain't it? | ||
| Don Schaeffer
Valued Member Username: don_schaeffer Post Number: 145 Registered: 12-2003 |
Thanks JM | ||
| LJ Cohen
Moderator Username: ljc Post Number: 3048 Registered: 07-2002 |
Don, Some lovely language and images in this one. Some crits in-line My son's tree grows slim, visible through the blinds as I emerge with my doubts from the dark night sea flags life like the air, <--not sure I understand this line--is it the tree that flags life? glowed today <--also the tree? as I opened my eyes amid worn, settled things <--love this line, Don in the eerie first light of a tardy dawn. <--makes me wonder why 'tardy'. Perhaps I don't need to know--it does bring me back to the relationship b/w the father and son. This is lovely. best, ljc http://ljcbluemuse.blogspot.com/ | ||
| Don Schaeffer
Valued Member Username: don_schaeffer Post Number: 148 Registered: 12-2003 |
thanks LJ | ||
| Laurie Byro
Advanced Member Username: lauriette Post Number: 1294 Registered: 11-2003 |
excellent poem lovely laurie | ||
| Don Schaeffer
Intermediate Member Username: don_schaeffer Post Number: 160 Registered: 12-2003 |
thanks very much Laurie |
